By Cole Gibsen
Published March 21, 2012
Crescent Moon Press
That’s right! We’re back with yet another mermaid story! I just can’t get enough of these. Today’s spotlight is on BREATHLESS by Cole Gibsen. I came across Breathless months ago and counted down the days till its release. The cover immediately caught my attention. Yes, the young woman standing provocatively in a prom dress is beginning to become exceedingly cliché, but the fact that the cover revealed a woman underwater drew me in. I knew it could possibly only mean one thing – Mermaids! And I was right. Gibsen’s portrayal of mermaids was unique because instead of dealing with merMIADS, we are dealing with a merMAN. That’s right! Our main scaly friend is indeed a man!… Well, half a one anyway.
Breathless is about a young woman named Edith who lives in a home with a very strict, military regime. Her stepfather is more heartless machine than father and all Edith wants is to be good enough in his eyes. Edith’s life is in jeopardy. Her stepfather is threatening to ship her off to military school after she is accused of causing a severe boating accident which resulted in multiple deaths. Edith can’t afford to divulge the truth of how she survived the accident. No one would believe her. Worst of all, the creature who was responsible for her rescue won’t allow her to forget. Edith has now been sucked into a world she never could imagine existed and brought into a war that has been brewing between her kind and theirs for countless years. Will she have the courage and strength to do what needs to be done in order to save the human race?
Based upon the book description this story sounds fabulous. Unfortunately, my quest has led me to a most frustrating end where the description on the back cover does not live up to the pages within. One of my biggest pet peeves is when an author will write a book that feels like nothing more than one big prologue and Breathless is certainly one of those books. Now I’m not saying the whole book was horrendous. I actually enjoyed it here and there. But if any of you are waiting for a book with serious content, depth, or character development, then you’re just going to have to wait for future books in the series. Regrettably, even then I can’t make any guarantees.
The author actually brings up some very interesting and great topics in her novel. I love books that focus on the little things, the most forgettable yet most gratifying moments in life. One of the main topics the author ‘swims’ around (Yar har! I’m so punny!) is what makes us human. However, the author fails horribly with the ever so important concept of showing, not telling. The characters have these great discussions about what it’s like to be human but the author doesn’t provide any experiences or background to help the characters come to their conclusions. These thoughts just seem to magically appear in their little noggins. Epic. Fail.
I must take a moment and warn those of our followers who reside more on the sensitive side. The material at the beginning of the book is iffy. It involves teenagers doing inappropriate things: underage drinking, smoking illegal substances, and a lot of cursing. Luckily, this kind of content is only at the beginning with the exception of the cursing. Foul language is pretty much throughout the whole book.
Some of the characters in this book were enjoyable and some were a bit difficult to digest. The stepfather is a horrible, vicious man. Get ready to loathe him entirely. I enjoyed Edith because she reminded me a lot of myself. So I related to her easily. Edith is not the type of person who is temperamental or lashes out at others when she’s upset. Instead, whenever she is provoked she lashes out in her mind. On the outside Edith is calm and collected but on the inside she’s screaming. Edith is a bit of an emo-child. She chooses to be rather gothic in appearance but she has clear justification for the way she dresses and it’s not your overly common, ‘I hate the world and everyone in it’ kind of attitude. It was actually really interesting to get into her mind and come to understand why she chooses to wear nothing but black.
Bastin was an absolute sweetheart. I’ll admit his physical appearance was extremely strange but he is so sweet towards Edith. He’s the type of person who would do anything to make her happy. His soul purpose in life is to give Edith the world. He’s also very mysterious. At the beginning when he keeps visiting Edith on land he genuinely seems interested in getting to know her and learn more about humans. But you know deep down there is more to his frequent visits than he’s letting on.
Unfortunately, the setting for this book caused one of the most confusing reading experiences I’ve ever had in my life. I keep questioning whether I read it correctly or not. I don’t know whether to blame the author for her lack of description or myself for possibly missing something important while reading. Where in the world are we!? Is Edith’s house next to the ocean or a lake of some kind? Majority of Edith’s and Bastin’s secret meetings take place either on the beach or at the lake and I could never tell where they were at. If I thought they were on the beach it turns out they were at the lake, and vice versa. You’ll understand my frustration when you read the scene where Bastin dives into, what you think is the ocean, and returns with an alligator in his arms. I went berserk. I thought, “Alligators are not salt water creatures, Author Gibsen! Epic fail on your part!” But it turns out during that particular rendezvous they were in the Bayou…Yeah, I really wish someone would have told me.
I regrettably had some pacing issues with this book. The moments where Bastin and Edith were apart were not strong or interesting enough to keep me focused. Therefore, I skimmed a lot. One thing you must know about me is I love romance novels – but not the trashy ones! Which is why I stick with YA books. More times than not I always come across a book that doesn’t have a strong enough storyline or plot which means the only reason I continue to read it is for the fluffy content. It doesn’t happen very often but an author should know he/she has written a wonderful piece of literature if they’ve got me sucked in and entertained without the romance. Breathless is NOT one of those books. On that romantic note, I should also warn my fellow readers to brace themselves for a case of “Insta-Love” on Edith’s part. When Edith learns who Bastin is there is a split second of denial but then she seems to move on from that rather quickly. She accepts who he is and falls into fixation way too fast.
There are two specific things I despised more than anything else in this book. Number one: Course language. This may not bother some but to others, like myself, it was incredibly annoying. I am a firm believer that profanity is a weak mind trying to express itself forcibly. However, I do understand that in the world we live in that’s just the way people talk. So although it was annoying I was able to move past it relatively quickly. Number two (and this one felt like my wisdom teeth were being pulled out all over again): Typos. While reading, I always seem to catch at least one or two typos and normally I don’t bring up those mistakes in my reviews because I understand mistakes are made once in a while. However, the fact that I’m talking about this is a sign that there were too many typos in this book to keep my mouth shut. I strongly recommend that Gibsen either hire herself an editor or fire the one she’s got.
In the end, Breathless by Cole Gibsen was an enjoyable read but it was nowhere near a mind blowing novel. At this point I’m planning on reading the sequel but don’t expect me to be counting down the days this time.